Mustapha H
2 min readOct 5, 2023

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Nadine, I love the imagery and emotion you've evoked here. It's a beautiful portrayal of a soul's journey towards finding love and connection.

The opening line, "In an artsy caravan, painted with varying hues of dawn," instantly drew me in with its vivid imagery. It sets the stage for the narrative of a wandering gypsy soul, a character who feels so alive and spirited. The use of the caravan, symbolizing both her journey and her freedom, is just brilliant.

Your choice of words in "With a heart full of fire and eyes like the stars" is incredibly evocative. It paints a picture of a strong, passionate woman full of life and dreams. Her dance has such a feeling of unbridled joy and freedom, "unbound by life’s bars."

I especially appreciate the transition from her free-spirited wanderlust to finding love so profound that it gives her journey new meaning. The lines "In the gaze of a stranger, her journey finds pause, In the warm, silent promise of love’s gentle cause" were particularly poignant. It speaks to that unexpected moment when two souls connect, and everything fades away.

The concluding lines give a sense of enduring love, emphasizing that while they might be in love, they retain their freedom. The phrase "No chains to bind them" is powerful, suggesting their love is a choice, not a limitation.

Overall, Nadine, this beautifully crafted piece speaks volumes about love, freedom, and the human journey. The rhythms and imagery evoke such strong emotions. Kudos to you for creating such an evocative piece. Your words have a certain magic that's captivating!

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Mustapha H
Mustapha H

Written by Mustapha H

I'm passionate about poetry, nature, travel, and exploring life through reading, writing, and communicating.

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